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Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time management. Do you agree or disagree?

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The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your argument well.
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You have made a good attempt to explain the importance of time management for students, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • time management
  • self-discipline
  • personal responsibility
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • peak productivity periods
  • real-world demands
  • effective time management
  • controlled environment
  • learning preferences
  • academic performance
  • potential drawbacks
  • misuse
  • procrastinate
  • frameworks and support
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