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Some people believe that universities should only offer places to students with high marks, while others believe that people of all ages should be allowed even if they don’t do well in school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education has become an indispensable part of our life.Some people say that academic
institution
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institutions
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 should
provides
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 only for
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pupil
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pupils
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 who complete their schooling with high grades in all modules.
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,others believe that educational academics should allocate all
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age
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 groups.In
this
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 essay ,I will elaborate on both
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viewpoints in detail and reach a logical conclusion.
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schooling,most
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the
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scholar prefer to start their career
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 early life
instead
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 of going to university.
This
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 is mainly occurring
due to
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 school children did not get the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 for
higer
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higher
 studies.
Moreover
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,students with higher marks have the ability to achieve a good future.Because
,
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they have the capability and particular skills for learning .
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,some report shows that students who pass with more marks in
academy
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 have the
chances
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 to get
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good marks in degree courses. On the other side,some individuals think that
age
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 is just a number to learn at
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.Humans
at
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their
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old
age
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 have the skill to understand simply
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 their experiences and knowledge even if there
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are
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 low grades in schools.
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,the older
age
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 people considered the study
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 important to get a job.
Hence
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,they will struggle to take a course.
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,25 per cent of learners in the college are at the
age
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 of 50.
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,they are getting better
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marks
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 in each module.So,giving
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to any
age
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 group is not a big deal to colleges. In conclusion,
academic
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an academic
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 institution is essential for learning for
school
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a school
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 child who
achieve
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 a good future in their lives.
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Although
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,we need to consider the people who are
at
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the
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old
age
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 .I believe that they can learn
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thing
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things
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due to
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 their
experienced
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experiences
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life
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in life
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.

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task achievement
Try to enhance the argument by providing specific and varied examples to strengthen your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a logical progression of ideas with better use of linking words to connect points smoothly.
task achievement
Avoid repetition and aim for more concise expression to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
You have included an introduction and conclusion, which frames the essay nicely.
task achievement
Both viewpoints are discussed, showcasing a balanced perspective.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint, showing personal engagement with the topic.
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