Some people believe that natural ability is necessary to be successful at sports. Others believe that hardwork and practice is more important. Discuss both the sides and add your own opinion.

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large number of individuals feel that
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the opposing stance is that
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both views and
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will explain why I believe the idea that hard work and
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for
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win
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sports
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more likely successful in their life.
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body to get a gold medal in
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all
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of difficulties and
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most of
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athletes
are earning more money than other people, clearly they have more attractive
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appearance
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and full
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enthusiasm
, becoming more popular among the
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and leaders, providing them more opportunities than other people.
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, others think
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more
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significant for
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scientist
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good at sports but they invented
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numerous
items which let human society
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great
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, Edithon who invented electronic lights
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humanity from darkness,
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the report
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thousands of materials for
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lamp's wick. He said 99% of
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is
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while
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is talent.
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hard work and
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is
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very important for
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. In conclusion, I believe both sides of the
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have their merits. On balance, I feel that
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hard work
and
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are vital for
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This
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is because in my view
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for
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everyone who
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willing to
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success
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in their lives.

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Improve grammatical accuracy to avoid miscommunication.
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Provide more detailed examples or explanations to support main points.
structure
Make paragraph connections more explicit to enhance coherence.
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Good attempt to discuss both sides of the argument.
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Clear introduction and conclusion provided.
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Personal opinion included, aligning with the essay task.

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