The graph below shows information on employment rates across 4 countries in 1970 and 2000.

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 4 countries in 1970 and 2000.
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The graph illustrates an overview of gender distribution at work in four distinct countries - Belgium, America,
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, and
Indonesia
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- over the period from 1970 to 2000.
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, male employees accounted for the majority of the workforce in the four countries between 1970 and 2000.
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, employment rates for both genders declined over
this
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period. In 1970, the gender distribution in the American workforce was nearly equal, with 86% of males and 78% of females employed.
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, there was a considerable difference in the gender distribution in the other countries:
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% of males compared to 63% of females in Belgium, 76% versus 56% in
Japan
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, and 84% against 65% in
Indonesia
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. Over the following 30 years, the percentage of male employees in the US slightly declined to 79%,
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Belgium’s proportion fell to 52%, and in
Japan
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and
Indonesia
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, it reached 63% and 74%, respectively. Meanwhile, the percentages of the female workforce in the US,
Japan
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, and
Indonesia
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were almost identical, at 45%, 47%, and 50%, respectively. Notably, Belgium had the lowest proportion, at only 8%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • economic indicators
  • comparison
  • trends
  • improvements
  • declines
  • anomalies
  • fluctuating
  • economic policy
  • financial conditions
  • technological advancements
  • educational levels
  • standards of living
  • poverty rates
  • well-being
  • implications
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