You are moving to a new country to go to university and will need a part - time job . You have a friend who lives in that country . Write a letter to your friend . In your letter , apologise for not staying in touch explain why you're moving to this country ask your friend if he / she can help you find a job .

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Dear Ruchin, I trust you are doing well. It has been a long time since we met

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time. I am writing

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letter to

know

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more information about how to find a part-time job in Canada, as I am moving there next month for my

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studies.

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, please accept my apology for not staying connected

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my final exam of grade 12th. First of all, I discovered that the University of Waterloo has an excellent course regarding the Human Resource Management study, which would help me to enhance

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and build my career.

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this

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, I

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want to experience

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snowy weather of Canada.

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, I know that you are working as a recruiter in the employment agency. I would be grateful if you could help me to provide some guidance for hunting employment. I hope you

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get excited after reading

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letter. See you soon. warm regards, Dhruvi Patel

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logical structure

Improve the logical structure by ensuring smooth transitions between the reasons for moving and the request for job assistance.

single idea per paragraph

Consider breaking the second paragraph into smaller sections to focus individually on the reasons for moving and your interest in experiencing snowy weather.

complete response

The letter includes a clear apology for not staying in touch.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is suitable, friendly, and polite, making it easy to ask for assistance.

greeting and closing

The opening and closing of the letter are well-executed, providing a warm and personal touch.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

157 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Apologize for not staying in touch: 'I feel terrible about not being in contact more often...', 'I'm sorry for not keeping in touch as much as I'd like to...'.
Moving: 'I'm thrilled to be moving to...', 'I've been given an amazing opportunity to study at...', 'I am on the brink of starting a new chapter in...'.
Part-time job: 'I am hoping to find a part-time job...', 'It would be great if you could help me with finding...', 'I am eager to work and gain some experience...'.
Study and university: 'I will be joining...', 'I have enrolled in...', 'My course will be...'.
Requesting assistance: 'Do you think you could help me out with...', 'Would you mind giving me some guidance about...', 'Could you keep an eye out for...'.

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