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When we meet someone for the firsttime,we generally decide very quickly what kind ofperson we thinktheyare and if we likethem or not. Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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Nowadays,it is generally considered that the first impression is the
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 many people Use synonyms communitycrowdfamilyfolknationpopulationpublicsocietybodiesbourgeois It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score. take it seriously to make a quick judgment about someone they meet,in my perspective, I believe that it creates a lot of misunderstandings when we decide quickly about someone's personality,
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 attitude is not worthy to make strong and ever long relations,and in many situations really bad for the person to whom we make a judgment.
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 essay will explore the consequences of rapid response to someone's personality.
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 a quick response to anyone's personality.
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strangers for matchmaking and it is often seen that many families simply do not like the cultures of each other's families but after spending some time in relation and frequent meetings develop
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 in cultural norms and
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find it interesting.
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,in Asian countries where families are
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 they prefer to meet with another family twice or thrice before they make any decision.
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 ,it shows that personalities can not be judged by first impressions.
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,when students start their university lives they meet pupils whom they never met before.They often make friends quickly , like their company, and enjoy spending time with them but later realize they are dragging them into criminal activities.
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,a survey conducted at the University of California
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illustrated that more sweetest bodies often spoil their truster's lives by gaining their trust.
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,never make any decision about people who are strangers take some time to know about them.
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,snap judgments
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 on first meetings can be influenced by personal biases and societal stereotypes,and it is important to be aware of these factors and try to counteract them.
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,in my opinion ,it can be concluded that
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 snap judgment is important in some situations where we make quick decisions,it is often proved biased in the long run when people make long-lasting relations, with university students and friends.

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task response
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines both sides of the argument before providing your perspective. It will enhance your task achievement score.
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Work on a more balanced discussion by including more counterarguments and addressing them clearly to deepen your analysis.
coherence cohesion
Try to ensure a smooth transition between your paragraphs. This could be done by using cohesive devices to link ideas more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates directly to your thesis and guides the reader through your argument.
task achievement
The essay provides relevant and specific examples, which strengthen the argument and support the main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear structure in the essay; introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion are present, guiding the reader logically through the argument.
coherence cohesion
The use of vocabulary is varied, which helps to demonstrate a broader range and understanding of the English language.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • first impression
  • snap judgment
  • immediate decision
  • subconscious observations
  • personal biases
  • societal stereotypes
  • accurate assessment
  • misjudgments
  • business or social situations
  • instincts
  • open-minded
  • true personality
  • counteract
  • unfounded
  • biases
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