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Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change while others think it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#believe #people #efforts #fight #climate #change
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Many
people
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 are arguing if we should just give up fighting
climate
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change
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 or if we still have time to make an effort and fight it. In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss both sides of view and give my personal opinion.
Firstly
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, it is well known that
climate
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change
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 affects everyone,
therefore
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, if we
decided
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 that we should not continue doing things to combat
pollution
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, we will have to accept that many
people
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and
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apply
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especially poor persons will be the one that suffers the most.
In addition
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, if we think like
this
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, there will be no control over industries and how much can they contaminate.
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, right now it is not allowed to build a factory
in
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on
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 both poles, but
with
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from
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this
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 point of view that would not be a problem and any company could do it, which would cause several consequences in our lives even death.
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,
people
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that
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who
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 think it is possible to revert
climate
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change
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 and go back a 100 years ago, it is completely mistaken.
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, what we can do is try to fight
climate
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change
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 and control the amount of
pollution
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 that we
cityzens
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citizens
 and especially companies and countries like China and
United
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the United
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Stated
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generated
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. Because,
eaven
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even
 if the
comun
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common
people
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 are recycling it is not enough to fight
climate
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pollution
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. In
coclusion
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conclusion
, to do
anyting
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anything
 and just adapt to
consequences
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the consequences
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 of
climate
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change
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 would be accepting that the world
it
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apply
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is going to be
unihabitable
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uninhabitable
inhabitable
 for us in the future.
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, in my opinion, it is best for us to continue to try fighting
pollution
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, but
acceting
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accepting
 that we will not have the world that we used to have.
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coherence cohesion
Enhance logical transitions between paragraphs to improve overall flow.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and evidence to back up each point made.
task achievement
Clarify sentence structures and avoid small grammatical errors for clearer communication.
task achievement
Successfully addresses both views of the debate on climate change.
coherence cohesion
Well-structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
Presents a personal opinion after discussing both viewpoints, fulfilling the task requirement.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy
  • afforestation
  • sustainable practices
  • extreme weather events
  • carbon emissions
  • infrastructure
  • agricultural practices
  • moral responsibility
  • ecosystems
  • green jobs
  • economic growth
  • job losses
  • poverty alleviation
  • quality of life
  • proactive measures
  • balanced approach
  • green technology
  • unavoidable impacts
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