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The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
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The graph illustrates the number of
people
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participated
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who participated
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 in various club events at a social centre in Melbourne, between the years 2000 and 2020. Generally, the film club remained the most popular one with
a
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minimal fluctuation.
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, martial arts
recieved
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received
 steady attention from the
people
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. On the upward trend, table tennis and musical performances have an increase in participants. Meanwhile, amateur dramatics was the only one with
decreased
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 number of members. For the film club and the martial arts, the number fluctuated throughout the years, with the former always
stayed
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 as the largest social activity in the centre with more than 60
people
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 every year,
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 the latter had around 30-40
people
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.
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,
the
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table tennis had the most rapid increase, from 20 members in 2010 to more than 50 members in 2020,
same
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the same
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 as the musical performances, but with a more
steadily
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steady
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 incline.
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,
the
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amateur dramatics had a gradual decline since 2005, from around 30
people
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 to less than 10
people
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 in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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