The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
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The given table illustrates the money allocation of
police
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in an English area
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the pie charts demonstrate the origin and how it was allocated
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in two specific years
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2017 and 2018.
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, the
police
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investment
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experienced an increase in all sources.
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, the budget for technological purposes saw an upward trend,
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the opposite was true for infrastructure and transport, except for salaries, which remained unchanged. Taking an initial look at the table, there was a rise in budget allocation. For
investment
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in the national government, the
police
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budget allocated for
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purpose slightly increased from 175,5m in 2017 to 177,8m in the next year. The same pattern was seen with regard to the
police
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investment
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in local taxes and other purposes from 91,2m to 102,3m and 38m to 38,5m, respectively. Turning toward the remaining pie charts, it is evident that 75% of the
police
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source was spent on infrastructure and transport in 2017, which
then
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dropped to 69% in 2018.
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, the
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proportion
of
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spent on technology doubled during
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period, from 8% to 14&.
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, Salaries accounted for 17% of
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investment
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, remaining constant in both 2017 and 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, investment, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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