The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
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The chart illustrated data
of
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international sales of gaming
software
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,
CDs
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and
DVD
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/
Video
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.
Overall
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,
DVD
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/
Video
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showed
remain
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growth,
as well as
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games
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software
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.
On the other hand
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, a gradual decrease
seem
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at
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in
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CDs
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.
According
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the information, the highest sales belonged
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CDs
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to CDs
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over the period that rose
peak
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which
are
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35
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billions
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in 2000.
In contrast
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, the lowest selling
demonstrated
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at
games
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software
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.
Firstly
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, there was
significant
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a significant
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gap between
CDs
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and other items
that
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which
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was
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were
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nearly 17
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billions
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billion
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for
DVD
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/
Video
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and 23
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billions
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billion
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for
games
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software
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.
However
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, over the period
this
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number fall
2
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by 2
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billions
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billion
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regarding
DVD
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/
Video
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.
Nevertheless
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. gap
among
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between
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CDs
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and
games
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software
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was diminished little.
Secondly
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,
DVD
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/
Video
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indicated approximately 22
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billions
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billion
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in 2000 and
this
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score reached 32% in 2003. Selling of
Games
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software
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increased over the years and
it
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apply
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rose
10
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from 10
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billions
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billion
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to 18
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billions
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billion
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respectively.
CDs
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lost their high
sells
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sales
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numbers
around
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by around
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3% and in three years they remained
33
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at 33
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billions
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billion
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words software, cds, dvd, video, games, billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • global sales
  • media types
  • software
  • significant increase
  • decline
  • popularity
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • peak sales
  • growth rates
  • fluctuations
  • digital technology
  • traditional media
  • digital downloads
  • streaming services
  • consumer habits
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