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Band 3.5

The governments should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the environment. Do you agree or disagree ? Use your ideas to support your side.

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Nations should shut down businesses that are producing toxic
waste
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 and not providing treatment facilities that are supposed to protect the environment.
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 is a statement that
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 agree with
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 because these companies affect the livelihood of many different species of
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 animals,
plants
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 and
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 humans. The
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 of microplastics and hydrocarbons that are found in
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sea water
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seawater
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 are causing fish and other
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 creatures to have shorter lifespans. These
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 animals are eaten by humans which causes chemicals to transfer to our bodies and cause many cancer-related problems. The water used to grow
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 is
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 full of unwanted
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. Many
plants
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 provide less fruit and rot much
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easely
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easily
 because of water full of toxic
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. The amount of unregulated
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 should be a priority
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 many governments around the world. Having a healthy and mindful
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 reduction can improve the general health of environments and
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 communities. The number of
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products
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 that contain unhealthy chemicals in their body can be toxic to citizens and cost a huge sum of money in medical treatments like cancer. Plantation will become much easier using eco-friendly ways to get rid of
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 and provide a
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healthy
 hydration system to these green creatures. I believe in the fact that a community riddled with factory
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 and plastic have a higher risk of early death and a surge in cancer and
desease
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disease
diseases
 related to pollution. Fish,
plants
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 and animals will have a shortened lifespan if these chemicals are not regulated properly.

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task achievement
Make sure to include more specific examples to support your arguments, such as real-world instances of companies that have had negative environmental impacts due to irresponsible waste management.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is logically structured, try to strengthen connections between points with transitional phrases and linking words to improve flow.
coherence cohesion
Provide a more detailed introduction that outlines your main argument and perhaps briefly mentions the supportive points you will cover.
task achievement
Your essay clearly states a position on the issue and provides supporting reasons.
coherence cohesion
You have a strong introduction and conclusion that effectively frame your argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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