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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate how West
park
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Park
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 Secondary
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School
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School's
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territoty
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territory
 has changed in three different years: 1950, 1980 and 2010.
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, we can see that in 1950 in the area there was a spot for houses,
the
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a
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school
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, a playground and a
farmaland
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farmland
 that only existed during that year.
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, where the residential zone was located a car park and a science block were constructed,
also
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 the replacement for the farmland was a
sportfield
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sportsfield
sport field
, and the playing zone did not have any modifications.
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, in the
last
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year
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year,
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 there was a significant change
,
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 because the parking lodge was expanded which caused a reduction of the playing field and the playground.
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, the main and second
school
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buldings
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buildings
 were not
modificated
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modified
. After taking all the details we can conclude that the only infrastructure that has not been
modificated
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modified
 over the years, is the main
school
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 building, but all the others have had at least one change.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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