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Violence in the media promotes violence in society. To what extent do you agree?

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Many people tend to believe that violence on TV leads to the rise of criminals in real life. I partially agree with
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 a phenomenon. On the one hand, cruel movies and series can romanticise the destructive behaviour of their main characters. There is no denying the fact that the public can replicate the wrongdoings of some fictional communities.
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 the statistics, after the release of the series ‘Euphoria’, some Americans, including teenagers, were indulged in drugs. The main female character there was struggling with drug addiction,
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, in reality, individuals were curious about substances, resulting in purchasing these unhealthy products illegally.
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, I firmly believe that it is always the people’s choice to commit crimes. Society itself is in charge of its actions, so the ultimate responsibility should be put on each person.
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, many movies show the consequences of delinquent behaviours, preventing the deviants` duplication. As an illustration, I remember how overwhelmed the people were after watching the new ‘Joker’. These flicks contained a lot of cruel scenes, but the audience was not encouraged to become violent as
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, mainly the public is stable and thoughtful enough to understand the possible outcomes of committing the wrongdoings, so looking at the violent scenes is only a way to relieve stress for them.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure to maintain a balanced structure and address both sides of the argument equally to enhance coherence.
Task Achievement
Try to elaborate more on each argument with additional examples or data to enhance clarity and depth.
Task Achievement
The essay effectively presents both sides of the argument, acknowledging that violence in media can influence society while also recognizing personal responsibility.
Task Achievement
The inclusion of specific examples like 'Euphoria' and 'Joker' adds depth to your arguments and demonstrates relevance.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that restate the main argument, providing a good structure.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Desensitization
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Imitation
  • Media regulation
  • Cultural context
  • Exposure
  • Social influence
  • Violent imagery
  • Psychological impact
  • Norms and values
  • Media consumption
  • Sensationalism
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