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Cam 14 - Test 4 Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Nowadays, Employees are moving forward to a different way of working, where flexibility and control over the
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 schedules are more important than stability.
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 thinking ends in being "Self-employed". In
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 essay, we are going to talk about the principal advantages and disadvantages of
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 topic over working for a
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. On one hand, there are the advantages, as I mentioned at the beginning of
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 the possibility to practice another activity or even share with their loved ones.
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, being your own boss gives you the chance to get more knowledge and satisfaction.
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: A Step-by-Step Guide" written on www.businessnewsdaily.com, "starting a
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 can be hard
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, but if you break down the process of launching your new
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 into individual steps you can make it easier".
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 message means that the final result depends on your idea,
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 and dedication.
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, there are some disadvantages
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 as economic conditions, policies applied for the new entrepreneurs and the instability of the market, these may impact the final revenue despite all the efforts.
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 need to be careful when they are developing their ideas because some regulations can affect directly the
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. When you
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 for a
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, these issues are controlled by expert
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 looking to avoid economic and regulatory risks.
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 situation added to the stability that an employee can find in a
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 making the decision to be self-employed harder. In conclusion, being self-employed requires a lot of courage and hard
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, in some cases,
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 prefer to be in their comfort zone
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 of the adrenaline and risk related to developing a new
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. But in the end, the final decision for a person depends on her own ideas and beliefs.
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, in my personal opinion, I think that getting my own
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 is much better than working for somebody else, under their rules and schedules.

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You provided a clear introduction and conclusion which is essential for a well-structured essay.
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Your essay discusses both advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed, showing a balanced view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • flexibility
  • control
  • schedule
  • job satisfaction
  • passion
  • interests
  • traditional work
  • stressful
  • business
  • economic conditions
  • unemployment
  • opportunities
  • freelance
  • rise of technology
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