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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The illustration gives information about the process by which chocolate is manufactured.
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, there are ten steps to the process, starting from growing the cacao trees, going through a series of operations leading to the final steps of crushing and pressing, after which the end product would be ready. In the beginning, the cacao trees must be planted, the most common locations where these trees are grown would be: South America, Africa, and Indonesia. After planting, the pods are harvested revealing the white cocoa
beans
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, these
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 are later fermented and spread in a sunny place allowing them to dry. The
beans
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 now are considered to be ready for the next steps of the production, which happen in a factory, so they are packaged into large sacks and a train or a lorry is used to transport them. In the factory, the
beans
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 get roasted, at
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 stage the outer shells of the
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 must be removed before getting crushed and pressed. Once pressed, the liquid form of chocolate is extracted forming the final product.
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Try to include more specific details about the chocolate production process to enhance the depth of your response.
coherence cohesion
Consider including a conclusion or summary at the end to wrap up your description.
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The essay clearly describes each step in the chocolate production process.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure is maintained through the use of clear chronological order.
coherence cohesion
The language used to describe the process is clear and comprehensive.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harvest
  • ferment
  • roast
  • grind
  • cocoa mass
  • conching
  • tempering
  • stabilize crystals
  • molding
  • solidify
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