Today, newspapers and televisions are giving detailed descriptions on crimes. Some people believe such a practice will cause bad consequences and thus media should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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coherence cohesion
Finish the discussion of one point completely before moving to the next to avoid confusing the reader.
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The essay attempts to address both benefits and drawbacks of media regulation on crime reporting.
coherence cohesion
Introduces and concludes the essay with a clear statement of personal stance on the issue.
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