The graph below gives information on the number of participants for diffferent activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates five different kinds of activities (Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performances) and the
number
of Use synonyms
participants
between 2000 and 2020.
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Overall
, amateur dramatics had a slight Linking Words
increase
, going from 25 to 27 as for Use synonyms
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number
of Change the article
a number
the number
particpants
, but had a major Correct your spelling
participants
decrease
in 2005 going all the way Use synonyms
in
2020, which made it the least popular activity out of all of them. Change preposition
to
However
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film
club was the most popular out of them all, as it stayed on the top for all those 20 years. Table tennis had a slight Correct article usage
the film
increase
from 2000 to 2005 and stayed stable till 2010, but had a massive Use synonyms
increase
until 2020.
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Furthermore
, martial arts had slight Linking Words
chsanges
over the period given, starting from 2000, as it had a slight Correct your spelling
changes
decrease
from 45 to 30 Use synonyms
as
for Change preposition
apply
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number
of Change the article
a number
the number
participants
and had a slight Use synonyms
increase
, stopping again at 40 and again, Use synonyms
slight
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a slight
decrease
, stopping at 30 and was stable for those 5 years. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, we have got Linking Words
musicial
performances, which had a major Correct your spelling
musical
increase
from 2005 till 2010, going from having 0 Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
participants
to 10 and had a slight Use synonyms
increase
, which stopped at 12. After that, it was stable during these years.
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To conclude
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film
club was the most popular activity Correct article usage
the film
ouf
of them all, with Correct your spelling
of
out
having
68 Unnecessary verb
apply
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number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
particpants
. Correct your spelling
participants
On the other hand
, we have got amateur dramatics, which had a major Linking Words
decrease
, making it the least popular activity, with only Use synonyms
having
5 Unnecessary verb
apply
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number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
participants
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