The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the diagram illustrates the total of
shop
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closures
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and openings in the years 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the
number
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of
shop
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closures
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experienced a slight decline over the years except for one great fall in 2015.
While
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,
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the
number
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of new
shops
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showed a dramatic decrease on the same mentioned period.
According to
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the data, in 2011 the
number
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of
shop
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openings exceeded the
number
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of
shop
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closures
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with just below 9000
shops
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.
Whereas
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, that
number
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dropped in 2012 reaching 4000
shops
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.
Subsequently
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, the
number
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had a gradual elevation till 2014 as it reached around 6000.
However
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, they went into another drop in 2015 with 4000
shops
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.
Although
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, they stayed constant in 2016 and 2017 but declined again slightly to 3000 in 2018. Meanwhile,
shop
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closures
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increased slightly in 2013 with nearly 7000
shops
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.
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,
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they started to decrease in 2014 until they had a significant fall in 2015 reaching almost 500
shops
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.
Furthermore
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, the
number
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increased again in 2016 to reach 5000
shops
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and had a steady trend across the later years (2017 and 2018) with approximately 5000
shops
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, closures, number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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