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It is widely believed that transportation is the main source of pollution. While some believe governments should address this, others believe this is the responsibility of individuals discuss both sides.

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Many
people
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 think that transportation is the main reason
of
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pollution
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in
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 the
earth
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,
while
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 a bit of them believe that the governments should take the whole responsibility
of
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for
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pollution
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 ,
however
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,the rest of them think that the individual
have
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 to care about that problem.In my
opinion
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along with
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that
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 governments should be conscious
about
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this
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 problem , because it has the
rights
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 to save the
earth
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 and to
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 rules that help
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 the community in a better way. On the one hand , when the government give attention to these problems it will be reduced and everybody will obey
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this
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 rules because they don'
t
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 have a chance to
egnor
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ignore
 it for
the
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them
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 reason that ,
,
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people
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 will get paid if they don'
t
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 accept the conditions.
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example
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 governments nowadays
focuse
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focus
focuses
 on the combustion of
the
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fuel and ban it , so if someone
did
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 use it , there will be
a
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bad consequences for him and maybe he will stay in
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prison for a period of time , so
people
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 get afraid
from
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 that and they stopped using
this
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critieria
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criteria
. On the one hand , if the individual
take
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the
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responsibility
of
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for
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pollution
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 the world will be changed in a better way as they can use
a
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greener transportation ,
however
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,
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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people
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on
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at
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this
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 age and time don'
t
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 care about the environment , and they think that the air
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everyday
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 so we can'
t
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 rely on
people
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 in
this
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 situation .For
instant
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 they attend to use
a
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smart cars that require a lot of gases that have a huge
affect
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 on the air and it decreases the
pollution
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 and toxic gases in the
earth
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 , and the main damage will be on the animals , the variety of animals will
reduced
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be reduced
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 as well.
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with
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, the government has the hand to
sole
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solve
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 the problems in the community and without
it
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it,
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 we can'
t
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 live in
a peace
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peace
a feeling of peace
a sense of peace
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Moreover
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 we can say that
people
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 could help the environment and decrease the
pollution
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 if they were reached at school how the
pollution
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 is the worse thing to the
earth
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.

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task response
Work on refining your thesis statement to clearly outline your stance and briefly lay out the arguments you will discuss in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph has a clear main idea supported by coherent sentences. This will help improve the logical flow of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid repetition of ideas, especially when introducing each side of the argument. Instead, focus on exploring unique points that haven't been mentioned yet.
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Incorporate more specific examples to reinforce your points and make your argument more compelling. Ensure that the examples are well-reasoned and detailed.
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The essay clearly addresses both sides of the argument regarding who should handle transportation-related pollution.
coherence and cohesion
There is an attempt to organize the essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps to structure the response effectively.
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Your viewpoint is clearly stated, and you consistently maintain this stance throughout the essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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