Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be requierd to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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another kind
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services to
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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