The chart below shows the percentage of people of different age groups who went to cinema once a month or more in one European country from 2000 to 2011

The chart below shows the percentage of people of different age groups who went to cinema once a month or more in one European country from 2000 to 2011
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of people
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different
age
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who used to go to the cinema several times in a country that
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in Europe between 2000 to 2011.
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, what
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out from the graph is that the percentage of people who are under 35
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fluctuated over the past 11 years.
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35 years and over had growth to 10 percent and 2011.
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the graph, the group that between 25 to 35 and seven 214 years are having close presented over the period with the fluctuated increase.
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to 42 group
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increased slightly from 2000 to 2006
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the percentage rose Charli to
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50% in 2007.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cinema-going
  • Attendance
  • Frequency
  • Demographics
  • Trends
  • Percentage
  • Fluctuations
  • Technological advancements
  • Streaming services
  • Leisure activity
  • Data analysis
  • Decrease/increase
  • Age groups: Teenagers, Young adults, Middle-aged, Seniors
  • Periodic comparison
  • Socioeconomic factors
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