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Government plans to construct an airport in your locality. Write a letter to the authority. - Explain where you came to know about the news. - Describe the negative effects of airport construction. - Ask to consider alternate sits for the airport construction.

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Dear
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/ mam I am Gurbakhshish Singh from Brampton. I am writing
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 letter because
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 heard that
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the government
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 is going to
make
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build
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 an
airport
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 in my
area
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 and
i
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 want to submit a request to change the site of
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airport
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the airport
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 because it can create lots of problems.
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, today when
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 was reading
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the newspaper
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then
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i
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 saw
news
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the news
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 about the construction of
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airport
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 and after reading
deaply
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deeply
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 came to know about the construction site
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 in my
area
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.
i
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 want to request you to change the location of
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airport
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the airport
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due to
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 the following reasons. First of all, it is
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a residental
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residental
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residential
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 and
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 of my
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 is
near
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about half of million.
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 the noise of
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the airport
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airport
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 it is difficult to live there. To add more
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this
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, near my
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 there is
lot
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 of wildlife. Owing to
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airport
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the airport
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 it can disturb wildlife
also
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. it is my suggestion to make
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airport
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an airport
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 in
Celdon
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the Celdon
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area
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 because there is lots of free space and no
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residential
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 near about.
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 Faithfully Gurbakhshish Singh 2 Jan 2025
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task achievement
Try to tailor your introduction more clearly to set up the purpose of the letter. You've touched on it, but giving a stronger preview statement might help.
coherence cohesion
Some of your sentences could be linked more cohesively with connecting words or phrases.
task achievement
The letter effectively conveys the key points: the news source, the construction issues, and the suggestion for an alternative site.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for addressing an authority.
coherence cohesion
You have used a greeting and closing, which is important in a formal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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