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The table gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented table compares data about the 6 different items of society in 2 various countries namely,
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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 at 2 points of time that was 1980 and 2002.
Overall
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, it was important that the total population and the portion of old people in both countries increased over the period of 12 years.
According to
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 the diagram, at the start, to total population per million in
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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 formed 14.7 and 13.7;
then
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 they grew and composed 24.3 for
Malaysia
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 and 19.6 for
Australia
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. The percentage of Males and females was complementary owing to the fact that the sum of them was 100%.
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, for
Australia
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, the percentage of men was constant at just under half, but For
Malaysia
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, it rose from 50.3 in 1980 to 50.6 in 2002. The given graph demonstrates that the Average annual population growth for
Australia
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 climbed from 1.2% in 1980 to 1.3% in 2002
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Malaysia
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 it made up 2.4% in the beginning;
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, it 3% declined. In both areas the proportion of people who were more than 65 increased.
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,
Australia
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 grew from 9.6% in 1980 to 12.4% in 2002 and
Malaysia
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 increased from 3.7% in 1980 to 4.3% in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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