The diagrams show how the bee makes honey, and the stages in the productin of honey.

The diagrams show how the bee makes honey, and the stages in the productin of honey.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams show how the bee makes honey, and the stages in the productin of honey.
The diagrams
depicture
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depict
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how
honey
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is made by
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bee
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bees
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and
also
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the process of
honey
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production is mentioned. There are 5
seprate
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separate
stages to making
honey
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in the
relavent
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relevant
factory. Initiates with
removalling
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removing
the honeycomb and ending with selling. The process of making
honey
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has 6 steps. In the first stage, it is obvious that we necessarily need the queen
bee
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. Honeycomb is the name of the place
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in wich
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wich
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which
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queen
bee
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spreads her eggs. Eggs become
to
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apply
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larva
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larvae
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after spending three days. It takes a week
to
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for
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larva
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the larva
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to get fully mature. In the
forth
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fourth
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phase,
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bee
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the bee
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leaves the hive in order to
collecting
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collect
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nectar from flowers. The final step
,
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is leaving nectar to make
honey
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. We should pass 5 steps to make synthetic
honey
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in the factory. First of all,
honeycomb
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the honeycomb
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is removed from
hive
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the hive
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by
suitable
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a suitable
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machine in order to acheaving
honey
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.
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boiling and filtering is begun. Qualified
honey
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is ready to
took
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take
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place in jars. At
this
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point, the final product is emerged and it would be available in the markets

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words honey, bee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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