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Task1 The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Task1 The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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These pie charts compare the amount of money they spend in the years
of
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1950 and 2010. It is clear from the graphs that they put their salary on Housing.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1950
the
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Housing
takes
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 space around three quarts which was 50.1 more than in the year
of
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2010.
However
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, the
least
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last
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 one was health care with only 2.4
percent
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.
In addition
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 in the year
of
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2010 happens a bit of
changing
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 in what they put their money, from what is shown food was the highest one with
thirty four
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 percent. And the
seconed
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second
 highest was housing . The education rate was similar for both years with only 0.3%.
To sum up
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, we could say that the most
significat diffrence
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significant difference
 was Other with approximately over ten
percent
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diffrent
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difference
.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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