The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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instagram

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Instagram

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followers

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millions

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Cristiano

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Ronaldo

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, The Rock, Ariana Grande, Kylie Jenner and

Selena

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gomez

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Gomez

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in the year 2018 and 2021.

Overall

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, all of the accounts experienced a

significantly

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significant

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increase between 2018 and 2021.

Initially

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while

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Selena

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gomez's

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Gomez's

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followers

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was

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above among those five influencers,

Cristiano

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Ronaldo

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's number of

followers

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outraced

at the end

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of the time. In 2018,

Selena

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Gomez

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's account had about 125

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millions

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million

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and

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apply

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the highest one as opposed to The Rock which was hitting a

low-point

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low point

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about 95

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millions

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million

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Cristiano

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Ronaldo

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and Ariana Grande had nearly

same

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the same

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numbers

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number

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followers

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apply

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about 110

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millions

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million

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Additionally

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, Kylie Jenner had almost 100

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millions

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million

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apply

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followers

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On the other hand

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Cristiano

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Ronaldo

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's number of

followers

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instagram

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peaked sharply and

seen

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the highest number of all time

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about 310

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millions

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million

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in the year 2021.

Also

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, Ariana Grande and Kylie Jenner's

followers

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were about the same and almost 250

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millions

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million

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, The Rock had nearly

same

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but a little more of them, around 252

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millions

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million

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in 2021.

However

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Selena

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gomez

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Gomez

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had the least

followers

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at the end

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of the period with about 245

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millions

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million

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words followers, millions, cristiano, ronaldo, selena, gomez with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

189 words

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bar chart
popularity
Instagram accounts
growth
decline
comparison
remained stable
significant change
new entries
exits
patterns
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noteworthy
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fluctuation
predominant
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