The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The line charts provide key information about employment in countries between the ages 60-64 between men and women from the
years
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1970 to 2000. The units are measured in the percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that the highest percentage of the
men's
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men
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and women from the age 60-64 were in Japan between the year 1970 and 2000 ,
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the females in Beigium were the lowest in both
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According to
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what is shown, male workers were higher in the year 1970 in all of the countries but lower at Beigium by 2000. In Japan, the two
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were almost the same within the two
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As well as
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USA
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lesser in 2000 than in 1970
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Australia. In terms of Japan and the USA were similar to each other by 1970 and 2000
in addition
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Australia and Belgium were nearly the same
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between
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1970 and 2000
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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