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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart
illustartes
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illustrates
 the
foreigners
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foreign
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 arrivals in five different
countries
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since
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from
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 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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, there are USA is the highest country over the time period
while
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brazil
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Brazil
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 and
egypet
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Egypt
 both these
countries
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 showed
the
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a
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 downward trend
ath
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at
 the
begging
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beginning
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 of 1995.
According to
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 the data,
americans
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Americans
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 were travelling it was
upto
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up to
 70
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millions
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million
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initially
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 and reached a peak
over
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of over
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 80
millons
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million
millions
in
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at
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end
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the end
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 of 2010. French travellers gradually increased their travelling during
this
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 period it was
approxiamtely
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approximately
 80
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millions
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million
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 in 2010. 20
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millions
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million
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 tourists
travell
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travelled
 around the world in 1995 but it
was
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apply
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notably increased over the period.
Specially
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Especially
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 their
tourists
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tourist
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numours
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numbers
 increased
20
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from 20
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millons
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million
 to 40
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millions
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million
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. Brazil and Egypt both these
countries
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 always showed
remain
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remained
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 constant their rate
while
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 these
countries
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1995
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from 1995
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 to 2000
remain
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remained
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 platued
ehich
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which
 was under 10
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millions
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million
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. But
it
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there
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was
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have been
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 fluctuations since 2000,
end
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at end
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 of the 2010
approxiamately
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approximately
 20
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millions
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million
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 tourists
travell
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travelled
 to different destinations.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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