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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the number of tourist
attraction
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attractions
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of
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on
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 a
caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
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 for seven years
since
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from
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 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, most of the visitors prefer to stay on
cruise
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 ships and
staying
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stay
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 on
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island
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the island
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.
Infact
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In fact
, it
was
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notably increased , it reached a peak
3.5
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of 3.5
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millions
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million
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end
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at end
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 of the 2017.
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 the data, visitors
willing
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are willing
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 to
cruise
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ship
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ships
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 stay and it showed
upward
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an upward
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 trend.
therefore
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, gradually millions of visitors liked to
spent
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 time on
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cruise
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cruises
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, it was
approxiamately
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approximately
 1.5
million
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 tourists.On the other, visiting on
island
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also
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has also
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 popular among
tourist
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tourists
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 since 2011 it
was
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has
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 slightly increased and
remain
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remained
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 constant number 1.5
million
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 individuals. But,it dropped in 2016 after increased
same
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the same
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 rate
1.5
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to 1.5
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million
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.
Total
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The total
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 amount of both these
it
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apply
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was earmarked for
upward
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the upward
an upward
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 trend. The majority of people
day
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on
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bay day
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Bay Day
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 prefer to
spent
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spend
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 their time
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cruise
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cruising
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 and
the
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on the
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island
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. During the period, most
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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 increased about
total
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the total
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 rate which was
approxiamately
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approximately
 3.5
million
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 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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