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Coherence and Cohesion
Strengthen your introduction and conclusion by clearly stating your position and summarizing main points. This helps set a clear framework for your argument.
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Task Achievement
The essay demonstrates a balanced view, presenting both the advantages and disadvantages of computer use. This indicates a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay maintains a logical structure by clearly distinguishing between the advantages and disadvantages of computer use.
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