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In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

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In many countries, the young generation neglects their voting
rights
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.
This
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 causes problems
such
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 as young
people
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 cannot develop their political
awareness
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, and their specific needs are not fulfilled. To solve
this
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 issue, the
government
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 should concentrate on addressing the problems faced by young
people
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, and political parties should create political
awareness
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 among
the
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young
people
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. If young
people
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 neglect their right to
vote
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, they cannot develop their political
awareness
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. They cannot develop them as responsible citizens who are aware of their
rights
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 and responsibilities.
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, the specific needs of young
people
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 will not be fulfilled if they neglect their voting
rights
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. They cannot demand their specific needs
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 as education and employment opportunities, safety and financial
allowences
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allowances
allowance
 if they do not apply their votes.
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, around 45% of voters in Bangladesh are young
people
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, and in
2019
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the 2019
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 National Election, they demanded their
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rights
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right
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for
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 free education until higher secondary school from the
new
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 elected
government
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. To solve
this
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 issue, political parties should create political
awareness
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 among
the
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young
people
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. They should encourage the young generation to apply their right to
vote
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 by saying that it will help to bring out future leaders
from
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them
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.
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, the elected
government
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 should focus on the problems of young
people
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. If they do so, young
people
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 will believe that it is beneficial for them to apply their voting
rights
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 because their needs will be fulfilled by their elected
government
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.
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, in India, in 2020, before
election
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the election
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, one political party promised to solve the issue of substance abuse among young
people
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, which encouraged young
people
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 to
vote
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their
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for their
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 favourite candidates in the election. In conclusion, young
people
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 cannot develop their political
awareness
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 and their specific needs will not not addressed by the
government
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 if they do not
vote
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. To solve
this
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 problem, political parties should create political
awareness
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 among the young generation, and the
government
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 should address the needs of young
people
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 after they become elected.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratic process
  • political instability
  • skewed representation
  • governance
  • erosion
  • civic education
  • alienation
  • policy-making
  • accessible
  • incentives
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