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The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums (the British Museum, the Natural History Museum, and the Science Museum) in London from 2000 to 2015.

The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums (the British Museum, the Natural History Museum, and the Science Museum) in London from 2000 to 2015.
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The graph illustrates the number of
visitors
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 to the
British
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Museum
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, Natural
History
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Museum
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, and
Science
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Museum
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 located in London over a 15-year period from 2000 to 2015.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the
British
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Museum
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 experienced the most significant growth,
while
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 the Natural
History
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Museum
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 and
Science
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Museum
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 showed a steady increase over the years. In 2000, the number of people who visited the
Science
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Museum
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 was 2.5
million
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,
while
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 the Natural
History
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Museum
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 had slightly more
visitors
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 at 3
million
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. In comparison, the
British
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Museum
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 started with the highest number of
visitors
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 at 4
million
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. Between 2000 and 2015, the
British
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Museum
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 saw a rapid increase in attendance, reaching 8
million
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visitors
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 by the end of the period.
In contrast
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, the Natural
History
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Museum
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 and
Science
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Museum
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 rose steadily, with the Natural
History
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Museum
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 consistently attracting slightly more
visitors
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 than the
Science
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Museum
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 throughout the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, british, museum, history, science, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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