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Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

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Coherence & Cohesion
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity and readability of the essay. Some sentences are unclear and affect coherence.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. This will help strengthen your arguments and demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to organize your points more logically, ensuring each paragraph focuses on one main idea.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a clearer conclusion that summarizes the key points and reinforces your stance on the issue.
Task Achievement
The essay identifies and discusses the main reasons some consumers prefer local goods over imported ones.
Task Achievement
Attempts are made to tie the trend of buying local goods to economic benefits, which is a relevant angle of exploration.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable consumption
  • supporting local businesses
  • community development
  • cultural heritage
  • self-sufficiency
  • environmental sustainability
  • imported goods
  • fresh produce
  • consumer preference
  • local producers
  • organic products
  • economic impact
  • carbon emissions
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