The diagram below shows the process of making cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Công Thành

The diagram below shows the process of making cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Công Thành
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The diagram illustrates the process of producing
cheese
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from
milk
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.
Overall
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, the production includes eleven steps.
Firstly
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is pasteurization and
finally
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is ripening. Making
cheese
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and
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man-made In the first step , raw
milk
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was pasteurized.The
milk
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is put into a machine which pasteurized the raw
milk
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and standardization and filtration .
Then
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the
milk
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is poured into a basin . They will pour some liquid into it , which is named Renet( enzyme) and has fermenting microorganisms . After 30 minutes to 2 hours,
milk
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will curdle . Continue , they will cut the curd into small pieces like corn and stir and cook it . In the next step, cheesemakers will dehydrate the
cheese
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by draining it . After the curds become smooth in the machine
milk
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is mixed with salt which makes fresh
cheese
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. But it is not the end. They pour into the box.
Finally
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, they put the boxes on the shelf and wait for the
cheese
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to ripen and finish.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cheese, milk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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