Learning to play team sports is an important part of a child's education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Setting
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personal
goals
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is very important because it helps us what we want to achieve. Before you're working on your personal
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you have to make a
list
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of your
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. By doing that you make your vision clearer and specific. There are some steps I do before
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a
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.
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I sit with myself and reflecting what I have done for the past year.
Then
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, I write all the things I want to achieve
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year, even if it's
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finaical
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financial
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goal. After writing all the
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I
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to achieve, I will do some
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prioritizing
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what are the
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that
very
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important to me and I
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aspire
to do them first.
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, I am working on the small steps to make
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as
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a habit. When make
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on your goal
as
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habit,
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congrats you
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through
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achieving that goal. When achieve your goal, write down
what
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the things you want to avoid doing
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for the next goal. Making
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list
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of personal
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has many advantages.
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they are making us more
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and directions.
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, they help us to stay motivated. And after
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achieving
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,
absolutly
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absolutely
you will be happy. In short,
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help us grow and succeed in life.
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Try to maintain a consistent point of view on the topic. Start with a clear stance and use evidence or examples to support it throughout the essay.
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Ensure every main idea is accompanied by supportive details or examples to thoroughly develop your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating clearer transitions between paragraphs to help the essay flow more smoothly.
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You clearly outlined your personal steps for setting goals and achieving them, which adds depth to the essay.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the benefits of setting personal goals.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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