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Some people think that we should use traditional methods to solve our problems, others say that we should use modern methods. Give your opinion and also explain how important is to use new methods.

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 no denying the fact that
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 it is a commonly held belief that we must solve the
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 that are facing us in the old ways. there is
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 an argument that says we must deal with it
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modern methods. In
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 I will analyse both views and express how it is essential to
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traditional methods to solve our
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 it might not be practical.
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, if we want to deal with our issues we must
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, if one of your sons
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 old keys do not open new doors
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, using the new tecnics could help us
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 each generation because it is significantly important .
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, using new ways of solving
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 is so essential because it could better work with our
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 it is going to be more useful to us. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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Consider providing more relevant and specific examples to illustrate your points, which can enrich your argument and make it more convincing.
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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that you elaborate on this more comprehensively.
coherence cohesion
Work on supporting your main points with more detailed explanations to increase the strength of your arguments.
introduction conclusion present
The essay provides a clear introduction that outlines both perspectives and states your intention to analyze them before giving your opinion.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion nicely sums up the discussion, reaffirming your stance on the topic.
logical structure
The essay is logically structured with paragraphs dedicated to each viewpoint, showing a good attempt at organizing thoughts.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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