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Your grandparents are planning a family gathering. They want to have a fun weekend somewhere. You know a perfect place to have the event. Write them an email and include the following things: • Tell them about the place you have in mind. • Talk about your experiences at the place. • Describe what the family can do there.

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Hello
my
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 dear grandparents, I hope you are doing well. My parent told me you have a plan to see family on the weekend that's why I'm very happy.
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, I want to tell you a good and
suit
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suitable
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 spot for your purpose. I would like to introduce you
a
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to a
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cottage
where
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that
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 is between Quebec and Montreal. There
has
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is
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an
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apply
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enough space for our family which has three rooms,
one
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 for my family, another
one
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 for my uncle
john
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John
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 and
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last
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the last
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one
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 for you, my grandparents, and
also
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 the location is very good because it's near three of us. I remember
last
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 winter I've been there for three days with my friends and we had a great time with each other. we bought snacks and foods
such
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 as popcorn,
finger
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and finger
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 food and we cooked. We made a fire and we sat down around
fire
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the fire
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 and
one
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 of my
friend
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friends
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 sang a song and we
passed
Verb problem
had
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 a wonderful time together.
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, we walked around the cottage and found
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a swimingpool
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swimingpool
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swimming pool
 and we swam,
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 we played a video game. There
has
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is
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 a hot tub
which
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where
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 you can
be relax
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relax
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. We can make a fire and cook chicken on it. Plus we can into
hot
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a hot
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 tub and chill.

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Grammar
Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb tenses. For example, use 'there is enough space' instead of 'there has an enough space.'
Spelling
Avoid minor spelling mistakes, like 'swimingpool' instead of 'swimming pool.'
Coherence and Cohesion
Use transitional phrases for smoother flow, like 'Moreover' or 'Additionally.'
Task Achievement
You have clearly addressed all the points: location, personal experience, and activities planned.
Engagement
Your enthusiasm and personal touch in the narrative make the email engaging.
Coherence and Cohesion
The organization of introduction, body, and conclusion in this informal email is well-structured.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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