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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
illustrate
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 the findings of a survey regarding the
coffee
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 and tea purchasing and
consumption
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 habits of people in five
australian
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Australian
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cities
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 over the past
for
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a weeks
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a week
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.
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, the data trends in the other four
cities
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 are quite similar, except for
Adelaide
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. In terms of fresh
coffee
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consumption
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, the trend was reversed, With
sydney
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 leading at just over 40%,
while
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 the other
cities
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 had lower percentages, Ranging from 30% to 43%.
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,
coffee
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varying
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 between 45% and 55%, with Hobart at the highest. Brisbane followed closely behind,
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sydney
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Sydney
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 recorded the lowest percentage at approximately 45%.
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 most striking feature is that
the
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instant
coffee
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 is the
most
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trendiest
consumption
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 in
Adelaide
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. Regarding cafe visits, Melbourne and Hobart topped the list, with over 60% of respondents reporting that they had gone to a cafe and passed 4 weeks. Sydney was
also
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 high in
this
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 category,
while
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 Brisbane and
Adelaide
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 showed lower figures, particularly
Adelaide
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, where the percentage was just below 40%. In brief,
while
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 there are some similarities in the
coffee
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-drinking habits of
five
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the five
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cities
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,
Adelaide
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start
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 out with the highest instant
coffee
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consumption
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 and fewer cafe visits compared to the other
cities
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, consumption, cities, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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