The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The table chart demonstrates the mobile phone counts in millions from different brands in six successive years, from 2006-2012.
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, Nokia had the highest number of mobile
phones
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sell
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until
last
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year she took a step back for Samsung to take place.
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While
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While Apple
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apple
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had no
any
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income in the first year. But later, it had
an
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clear increase in
it's
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sales. In 2006,
nokia
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was
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succeeded in selling 345
million
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mobile
phones
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which became the top one in comparison with the other brands: Ericsson, Samsung, Motorola and
Apple
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.
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, it started to improve its sales until reaching 2012, when it returned to the same as in 2006. Despite
Apple
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didn't get any chance to sell the mobile phone in 2006, It had
it
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first mobile
phones
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sale in 2007 which was 2.3
million
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and kept increasing
untilthe
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until the
dramatic jump in 2012 the number of mobile
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ws
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is
135.8
million
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which makes
Apple
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the 3rd place just before Ericsson and Motorola, where they were fluctuating over the years and became steady with 28
million
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mobile
phones
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in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, apple, million with synonyms.
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