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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates how many
students
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 were enrolled in
Manchester
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 University in 3 different years.It
also
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 shows the proportion of female and male
students
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 enrolled,and the
rate
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 of
students
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 that came from different
countries
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,and came from within a 40 miles distance from
Manchester
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.
Overall
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,
Manchester
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 University experienced a growth in the number of new
students
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 signed up over the time period.
Also
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,more people came from different
countries
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 over time.
On the other hand
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,the proportion of
students
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 that were 40 miles away from
Manchester
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 experienced a dramatic decline.
However
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, the
rate
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 of female and male
students
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 enrolled
were
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 fluctuating throughout the time period. In 1937,327 new
students
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 became part of
Manchester
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 University.The number of
students
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 signing up continued to increase significantly in 1967 and 2007 to 1133,and 6254,respectively.Males were more interested in applying than females in 1937, as out of the new
students
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 enrolled 55% of them were female
while
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 45% were male. They
also
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 grew remarkably in 1967,as they reached 65% out of 1133 new
students
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.
On the other hand
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, there was a decline in the percentage of females, where it was only 35%.
Nevertheless
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,in 2017 the
rate
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 of females rose, making 55% out of the 6254
whereas
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 males were only 45% out of the total. The
rate
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 of individuals coming from overseas increased throughout the period,
as well as
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 the number of
countries
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 they were coming from.Out of the 327
students
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 in 1937,6% came from 4 different
countries
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,
while
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 in 1967 7 per cent of the
students
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 came from 24 different
countries
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,and in 2017 32% of the
students
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 were from 102
countries
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.
Conversely
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, the proportion of individuals that came within 40 miles of
Manchester
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 was 55% in 1937,yet the
rate
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 decreased to 15% and 1-2% in 1967 and 2007 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, on the other hand, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, manchester, rate, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • increase/decrease in student numbers
  • post-war baby boom
  • globalization
  • technological advancement
  • education accessibility
  • demographic changes
  • overseas students
  • gender representation in education
  • international reputation
  • higher education
  • university capacity
  • social factors
  • economic influences
  • political factors
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