Air pollution is one of the most pressing environmental issues affecting cities worldwide. What are the main problems caused by air pollution, and what solutions can be implemented to tackle this issue?

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Nowadays many cities are
effected
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by
air
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pollution
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all around the world.
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, global warming and diseases, but
this
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issue can be tackled by making laws stricter and educational
programme
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programmes
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.
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, one of
main
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problem
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problems
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that can be noted is global warming.
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, the
temperature
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is gradually rising.
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is because of greenhouse gases which rise
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the
air
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and contribute to
temperature
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rise.
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, cars are really popular among people, but unfortunately they use fossil fuels and produce
emmissions
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emissions
. It
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to higher
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temperature
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temperatures
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and
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increase
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the level of water.
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, respiratory
deseases
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diseases
are more common now than in the past
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air
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pollution
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.
Therefoe
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Therefore
, people struggle with chronic
bronchits
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bronchitis
,
astma
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asthma
, lung cancer and other respiratory disorders and millions of them die each year. One effective solution is regulations by
government
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the government
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.
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to say, the
goverment
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government
should create strict laws, set limits on emissions and promote renewable energy. Another measure is educational programmes about
air
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pollution
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. When society
know
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the causes and the consequences, they understand how to help the Earth to become
better
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a better
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place for life.
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,
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the chinese
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chinese
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Chinese
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goverment
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government
made
massive
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a massive
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investment
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investments
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in solar, wind and hydropower which made China a global leader in renewable energy.
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Also
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China educate citizens on the health risks of
air
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pollution
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and encourage them to participate in clean
air
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initiatives.
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,
air
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pollution
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cause
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causes
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a lot of problems,
such
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as
rise
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a rise
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in
temperature
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and respiratory
desorders
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disorders
;
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, if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
comes up with strict laws and creates educational programmes,
this
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issue can be reduced.

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task response
The essay adequately addresses the task by identifying main problems caused by air pollution and suggesting possible solutions. However, including more specific examples and discussing potential obstacles to proposed solutions could deepen the analysis.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear logical structure with a defined introduction and conclusion, making it easy to follow. There could be more seamless transitions between some ideas to enhance the flow of the essay further.
language accuracy
Some minor grammatical errors (e.g., verb forms and spelling) are present but do not significantly impede understanding. Review these areas to improve language accuracy.
coherence cohesion
The essay begins with a clear introduction and ends with a concluding paragraph that summarizes the main points effectively.
task response
Good use of examples, such as the reference to China, that help to illustrate the points made about solutions to air pollution.
language use
Complex sentences are effectively used to explain points and link ideas across the essay.
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