in many countries nowadays , consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world . do you think this is a positive or negative development ?

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Nowadays , there is a growing trend toward importing international
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to local markets. I believe that
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a variety of
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is hilarious , only depending on these imported ones may impose a serious crisis on the economy
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the environment .
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the one hand , a majority of
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choices are important in every store to enhance biodiversity and introduce people to different cultures. To illustrate , importing nutrition supplies will support agriculture and create jobs both locally and internationally .
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, farmland would have an opportunity to share their crops with the globe
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return with high benefits to both the government and the farmer .
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method would improve the national economy and reduce part of the taxes on citizens.
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, overreliance on these
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can result in numerous financial problems.
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, supermarkets might prioritize
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imported goods at the expense of local agriculture , which causes a negative impact on economies and farmland owners .
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, transporting
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supplies relied heavily on trucks , ships , and trains which typically run on fossil fuels .
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, burning these fuels releases carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases into the atmosphere and increases the
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carbon footprint .
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showed that individuals using preserved
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are more likely to catch illness than people consuming fresh
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. In conclusion ,
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the presence of imported supplies in the supermarket will actually do not
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harm to the public, these
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should be limited to just half of the local foodstuff in the store to create a balance and overcome the risk
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political exploitation .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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