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The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.
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The table displays the
number
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 of individuals from
British
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, Germany, Italian, Polish and
Spanish
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 living in each other's nations in 2011.
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, Germany was the highest in the
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 of
people
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 who live in it.
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Polish
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Poland
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 was the highest in the
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 of its citizens who live in different nations, it was the lowest in the
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 of individuals who live in it.
British
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 was the second highest
in
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the
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apply
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number
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 of
people
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live
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 in it with
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a
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 total
1.037.000
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of 1.037.000
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 and most of them were Polish with 550.000.
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 lowest
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people
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number of people
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 who
live
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 in
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 was
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 with 71.000
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. Most of the
people
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 who
live
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 in Germany were Italian with 556.000 from 1,198.000 which was the highest in the
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 of
individualsn
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individuals
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live
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 in it.
People
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 who live in Italian were 196.000 and most of them were Polish with 106.000. Only 6.000
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people
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 live in Polish and most of them
were
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 German with 4.400 and
Spanish
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 was the lowest with only 170
people
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. 861.000
people
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who
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apply
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live in
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 and 391.000 of them
were
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British
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. The total of European
people
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 who live in different European
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countries
contries
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countries
were
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 3.298.000 and many of them were Polish with 1.68.000 and
Spanish
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people
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 were the lowest in living outside their country with only 202.170

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, british, spanish, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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