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Many voung people these days choose to live alone instead of living with other family members. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh any of its disadvantages?

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There has been an ongoing
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debate
 about whether living alone is better than living with family. Some argue that living alone
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promotes
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 independence,
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 others believe that being with family offers more emotional support, In my view,
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 living alone has benefits in terms of personal freedom, the advantages of
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living
 with family,
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 as emotional support and
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companionship
, outweigh these. Living alone
promots
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promotes
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 independence, and personal growth. People who live alone are responsible for all aspects of their daily life, including
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finence
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finances
 and making decisions about their routines. individuals living alone can decide exactly when to wake up, when to eat, and how to spend their free time without considering the needs or preferences of others.
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can
 lead to increased
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self-confidence
 and self
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 skills.
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, living with family offers emotional support and
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 of community, Being a part of
family
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a family
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 can provide
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companionship
,
reduce
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and reduce
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the
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loneliness.
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coherence and cohesion
Your essay lacks a proper conclusion. Try summarizing your main points and restating your opinion for a strong finish.
task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points. For instance, you could mention how living with family can help during challenging times, like illness or financial difficulties.
clarification
Consider revising sentences with spelling and grammatical errors for clarity and professionalism.
introduction
Your introduction clearly explains the topic and presents your stance on it.
coherence
The essay has a well-organized structure with paragraphing that separates different ideas.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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