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The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums (the British Museum, the Natural History Museum, and the Science Museum) in London from 2000 to 2015.

The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums (the British Museum, the Natural History Museum, and the Science Museum) in London from 2000 to 2015.
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The given line graph represents how many people visit three different museums, the
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Museum
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, the Natural History
Museum
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, and the Science
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 in London in the year 2013.
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,
according to
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 the data,
it is clear that
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 the figure for the
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Museum
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 was the highest throughout
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period in the chart. Meanwhile, the levels of visitors in the Natural History
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, and the Science
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 were recorded lower than the
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Museum
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. Looking more closely at the illustration, visitors to the
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Museum
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 significantly increased from 600 to 750 between
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 and July, recording their highest in the given period. After that on, in July, there was a dramatic decrease until August.
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, after that, they show an onward trend again. Meanwhile, the investigated population in
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 reveal a fluctuating pattern, beginning at 550
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 in
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 and recorded at roughly 450
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 in September. Regarding the Science
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, they account for 400
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 visitors in
June
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, and they gradually decline a range from 400 to 300 between
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 and August. But they recorded 450
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 people in September showing a reversed pattern and they hit their highest point during the given period.
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