The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums (the British Museum, the Natural History Museum, and the Science Museum) in London in 2013.

The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums (the British Museum, the Natural History Museum, and the Science Museum) in London in 2013.
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The line graph illustrates the
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of people who came to visit three different museums located in London in the period of June to September
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2013.
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, the
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Museum
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consistently came out as the most popular of the three, with the Natural History
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narrowly edging out the Science
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for second place. In June, the
British
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recorded an amount of 600 visitors. The
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began an
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trend the following month, welcoming more than 700 people, before decreasing and bouncing back towards the end of the timeline.
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the Natural History
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started just below the
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's volume in June at approximately 580, the Science
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began at only
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. Both museums experienced a decrease to low points in August of approximately 380 and 300 guests, before rebounding the following month, with both increasing to approximately just below 500, with the Natural History
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having a slight edge over the Science
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.
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