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The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums (the British Museum, the Natural History Museum, and the Science Museum) in London in 2013.

The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums (the British Museum, the Natural History Museum, and the Science Museum) in London in 2013.
The line graph illustrates the
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 of people who came to visit three different museums located in London in the period of June to September
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2013.
Overall
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, the
British
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Museum
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 consistently came out as the most popular of the three, with the Natural History
Museum
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 narrowly edging out the Science
Museum
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 for second place. In June, the
British
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Museum
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 recorded an amount of 600 visitors. The
British
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Museum
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 began an
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 trend the following month, welcoming more than 700 people, before decreasing and bouncing back towards the end of the timeline.
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 the Natural History
Museum
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 started just below the
British
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Museum
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's volume in June at approximately 580, the Science
Museum
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 began at only
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. Both museums experienced a decrease to low points in August of approximately 380 and 300 guests, before rebounding the following month, with both increasing to approximately just below 500, with the Natural History
Museum
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 having a slight edge over the Science
Museum
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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