The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates changes in the greatest number of
elephants
between the 9 key countries in Asia from 1997 to 2004.
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Overall
, Indian Linking Words
elephants
exhibited by far the highest level of the rate over Use synonyms
the
both years period. The vast majority Remove the article
apply
countries
decreased in number Change preposition
of countries
whereas
different patterns emerged for Cambodia and Laos.
Indian Linking Words
elephants
, from a peak in 1997, decreased in number to one-third after 7 years Use synonyms
while
the figure in Malaysia and Thailand dropped by two-thirds over the same time span. The remaining countries Linking Words
such
as China, Myanmar, Sri Linking Words
Lanksa
and Vietnam dropped in minor increments.
Cambodia's count, Correct your spelling
Lanka
on the other hand
, showed a reversal trend. The quantity of Asian huge mammals had a brief ascent at above 1500 in 2007. The only region which remained stable throughout the years was Laos with Linking Words
elephants
less than 1300 in its area.Use synonyms
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