The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates changes in the greatest number of
elephants
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between the 9 key countries in Asia from 1997 to 2004.
Overall
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, Indian
elephants
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exhibited by far the highest level of the rate over
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both years period. The vast majority
countries
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decreased in number 
whereas
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different patterns emerged for Cambodia and Laos. Indian
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, from a peak in 1997, decreased in number to one-third after 7 years
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the figure in Malaysia and Thailand dropped by two-thirds over the same time span. The remaining countries
such
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as China, Myanmar, Sri
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and Vietnam dropped in minor increments. Cambodia's count,
on the other hand
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, showed a reversal trend. The quantity of Asian huge mammals had a brief ascent at above 1500 in 2007. The only region which remained stable throughout the years was Laos with
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less than 1300 in its area.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trend
  • decline
  • increase
  • decrease
  • population
  • significant
  • dramatic
  • stability
  • data
  • estimate
  • notable
  • comparative
  • contrast
  • approximately
  • maximum
  • over the period
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