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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

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In the past, most
people
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 lived in small villages where everyone knew each other. Today, most
people
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 live in large cities, where they only know a few
people
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. Living in a small community has both its benefits and drawbacks. One of the main advantages of living in a small village is the strong sense of community. Everyone knows each other, which creates a friendly and supportive environment.
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 are often ready to help if someone is in need.
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 feel safer and more connected. Another advantage is the calm and peaceful atmosphere. Small villages tend to be quieter than big cities, which can be a great benefit for
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 who prefer a slower, more relaxed lifestyle.
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, the main disadvantage is similar
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 do some awkward things sometimes, so feeling ashamed might chase you. Not everyone wants to communicate with their neighbours, because of feeling shy and helpless.
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 there are a lot of
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 who enjoy being alone. Always being in neighbours' environment might make them feel anxious and uncomfortable. In my opinion, living in
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 big city is more convenient. You don't have to be afraid of your image. You can allow yourself to be whoever you want.
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Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to maintain a logical flow. This can improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly stated, providing a solid framework for the discussion.
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You have presented both advantages and disadvantages, addressing the task comprehensively.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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