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"As cities expand and populations increase, public transport systems are becoming increasingly important. Some people believe that improving public transport can significantly reduce urban traffic problems, while others argue that it is not an effective solution and that cities should focus on developing smart infrastructure for private vehicles. Discuss both views and provide your opinion on the best approach to address urban transportation challenges."

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In the modern world, the problem of urban
transport
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 is very relevant
due to
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 the growth of cities and an increase in population. For daily use,
people
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 choose public
transport
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 or private vehicles.
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, both types of
transport
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 have advantages and disadvantages that need to be considered in order to decide whether it is more important to improve public
transport
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 or develop infrastructure for users of private vehicles. On the one hand, improving the quality of buses, subways, etc. can help reduce the number of private cars. The consequence of
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 will be a reduction in environmental pollution and traffic on the roads. But
on the other hand
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, public
transport
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 is not adapted for
people
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 with disabilities.
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, public
transport
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 will not be available to
people
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 living in the suburbs or small towns. In modern cities, lack of free space is already a common problem. When it comes to personal transportation, private cars provide more flexibility in terms of timings and routes
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 is not possible with a bus or subway. Improving infrastructure will allow all
people
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 to move freely, regardless of where they live. But there is one significant drawback in the development of infrastructure for private vehicles,
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 is the lack of space for creating new parking lots and gas stations. In conclusion, I believe that improving public
transport
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 will be a more effective solution to the urban transportation problem.
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 solution will improve the environment in cities, reduce road traffic and traffic jams, and will
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 allow
people
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 who do not have a personal car to travel comfortably.

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task achievement
To enhance task achievement, incorporate more specific examples or case studies related to cities that have improved public transport successfully or examples of smart infrastructure developments.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, work on creating smoother transitions between ideas and paragraphs to maintain a logical flow throughout the essay.
introduction conclusion present
The essay begins with a clear introduction of the topic and presents both views on urban transportation solutions effectively.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes the writer's opinion and reinforces the arguments made throughout the essay.
supported main points
The main points are clearly articulated, focusing on relevant aspects of public and private transport systems.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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