You recently moved to a new house and you want to invite an old friend to stay with you. Write a letter to your friend. In you letter, - invite him to stay and suggest a date - briefly describe the new house and garden - say why you like your new house. You should write atleast 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin you letter as follows: Dear Jimmy,

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Dear Jimmy How have you been? We have not

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seen each other in so long. I have exciting

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. I recently moved to a new house and I was wondering if you would be happy to stay at my new place

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. Hopefully, you

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be able to stay as we have lots to catch up on. My new place comes with a garden full of trees and flowers.

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be able to breathe lots of fresh air and relax as I love greeneries. The main highlight of the house is the master bedroom with an ensuite and a walk-in closet.

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is really important for me as I love buying new clothes. Hope I'll hear from you soon! Best wishes, Joscelin

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Grammar

Ensure precise use of plural forms and articles. 'I have exciting new' should be 'I have exciting news.'

Structure

Clearly separate different ideas into paragraphs. You have managed this well, continue to do so.

Formal Tone

The greeting and closing are appropriate and friendly, fitting well with the tone of the letter.

Detailed Description

The description of the garden and master bedroom adds a personal touch and supports your reasons for liking the new house.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

130 words

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